시원스쿨 아이엘츠/토플

라이팅 체점 항목중에 복잡한 문장을 구사할줄 안다가 적혀있습니다.
저는 글을 적다보면 좀 너무 문장들이 복잡해지는데
외국인 라이팅 예시들을 보면 한 pharagraph 에 두문장 정도만 복잡하게 적더라구여/

사실 문장이 복잡해지면 논리력이나 문법 실수가 많이나올거같기도하고요

스피킹도 원래 장황하게 말하는 편에서 간단하게 답변하는 스타일로 바꾸고있는데
라이팅도 한두문장만 복잡하게적고 나머진 짧게 적는게 나을까요?
On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies. Firstly, academic qualifications are required in many professions. For example, it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher or lawyer without having the relevant degree. As a result, university graduates have access to more and better job opportunities, and they tend to earn higher salaries than those with fewer qualifications. Secondly, the job market is becoming increasingly competitive, and sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for one position in a company. Young people who do not have qualifications from a university or college will not be able to compete.

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